peer review

I think todays peer review went very well. My revision process will include me adding more detail in my essay while clarifying some points that i realized were confusing. The most effective peer review format would probably this on because it helped me find the points of my essay that weren't so clear and i now have suggestions to correct the errors rather just underlining. A main part i will add to the essay is a personal experience of a sweatshop worker so i can catch the attention of readers and elaborate more on their situation.